Date: 2005-10-26 06:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] krypton288.livejournal.com
Ooh, I like. Both Mal and Jayne felt in character and the situation was believable.
My only comment is that the exposition at the beginning felt out of place. However, if you're planning on turning these shorts into a something with a over reaching plot, then I get why you'd want/need it there.
All in all, quite an enjoyable read.
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