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Eventually, they're going to do this episode -- Reese rescuing Finch. I wonder how close to that episode your story will be?

You really do their voices well. I can hear the actors' cadence in the dialogue, and there's no hitches or anything.

Just a random bit for more authenticity: military men don't use the word "gun" when talking about guns. It's trained out of them. He'd refer to it as his weapon, or maybe his sidearm.