Fic: Clearing the Air (Firefly, 1/?)

[jedibuttercup]

PG-15; Firefly crossover. Mal recieves a mysterious package, leading the crew of Serenity on a voyage of discovery. Into every generation...

(Book's Legacy 1: Clearing the Air)

As of October 17, 2006, this story has been rewritten, added to, and moved to a separate community. Link above goes to new location. Story index is here.

(Originally x-posted to joss100 and afterserenity)

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[krypton288.livejournal.com]

Ooh, I like. Both Mal and Jayne felt in character and the situation was believable.
My only comment is that the exposition at the beginning felt out of place. However, if you're planning on turning these shorts into a something with a over reaching plot, then I get why you'd want/need it there.
All in all, quite an enjoyable read.

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[jedibuttercup]

> Ooh, I like. Both Mal and Jayne felt in character and the situation was believable.

That's good to hear, thanks. =)

> My only comment is that the exposition at the beginning felt out of place. However, if you're planning on turning these shorts into a something with a over reaching plot, then I get why you'd want/need it there.

Yep, this is going to be a series. Possibly quite a long one, given that I signed up to write 100 Mal-centric ficlets; the more of them I can chain onto the same plot (much of which I already have planned out), the better!

I hope you continue to enjoy future chapters.

[sappho-wilde.livejournal.com]

I enjoyed this quite a lot, too. The voices are seamless, and read all together it feels like an actual episode or movie. It's so easy to visualize Mal and Jayne talking, as you have them written.

One more to go! *smile*

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[jedibuttercup]

> I enjoyed this quite a lot, too. The voices are seamless, and read all together it feels like an actual episode or movie.

Thank you; I really appreciate the feedback. I try to 'watch' each chapter in my mind's eye as I write, picture the characters actually saying what I want them to, and edit accordingly. I hope you contine to enjoy future chapters!

[loriel-eris.livejournal.com]

Loved this one! That was Mal and Jayne all the way, totally in charcater, both with the voices and the actoins/naration. Just perfect. *g*

[empressvesica.livejournal.com]

Very nicely done! Just a heads up - if you start getting odd reviews on these after all this time - it might be my fault. I plan to rec this someday soon on my LJ. :D

Thank you!

[jedibuttercup]

> Very nicely done! Just a heads up - if you start getting odd reviews on these after all this time - it might be my fault. I plan to rec this someday soon on my LJ. :D

I never mind more reviews. Rec away. *grin*

[ninamazing.livejournal.com]

Man, I love Mandarin swearing. Also I love spamming your inbox with comments on every chapter of this story as I read it.

Dialogue here's great. Speculation as to Jayne's intent and more affirmation of how in tune Mal is with it = also great. This is the best post-Serenity fic I've read; it's awesome.

Btw, I got here through joss_100 and most people seem to be doing introspective looks at their topics in each ficlet, but you're doing a plotted thang, which surprised me at first but which is pretty darn cool, I'm thinkin' now.

Kudos! Thanks for a nice read.