Fic: An Uncluttered Sky (Firefly, Book's Legacy, 4/?)

[jedibuttercup]

PG-15; Firefly crossover. Mal recieves a mysterious package, leading the crew of Serenity on a voyage of discovery. Into every generation...

(Book's Legacy 4: An Uncluttered Sky)

As of October 17, 2006, this story has been rewritten, added to, and moved to a separate community. Link above goes to new location. Story index is here.

(Originally x-posted to joss100 and afterserenity)

Comments

[missmaximus.livejournal.com]

Another thoughtful and engaging chapter!

You are handling the crew and their dynamic with skill. Ensemble scenes tend to shortchange one or two of the characters in order to get the conversation where it needs to go, but not yours.

My take on Mal assuming that Kaylee and Simon will be bunking together permanently is this- Mal is clever when it comes to people but he has blind spots too. The fact that he mentioned how long Kaylee pined after Simon was plain dim. Getting and keeping are two different things. Kaylee is kinda the under-dog in this relationship and he shouldn't be pointing that out. Wishful thinking and his desire for everything to be neat and tidy, makes him decide that Kaylee and Simon are a done deal. I thought the fact that neither said anything to deny his assumption was just natural.

This is going SO well. All your nuance and skill is not going unappreciated.

BL #5

[jedibuttercup]

Sorry I've taken so long to reply. =)

> My take on Mal assuming that Kaylee and Simon will be bunking together permanently is this- Mal is clever when it comes to people but he has blind spots too. The fact that he mentioned how long Kaylee pined after Simon was plain dim. Getting and keeping are two different things. Kaylee is kinda the under-dog in this relationship and he shouldn't be pointing that out. Wishful thinking and his desire for everything to be neat and tidy, makes him decide that Kaylee and Simon are a done deal.

True. Mal does have more to say on the subject in private-- see Chapter 7-- but he was possessed of a mischeivous mood here, and let his mouth run away with him, I think. He does want the happily-ever-after for Kaylee, but can't resist poking at her a little, which is the kind of thing that often gets him in trouble (esp. with Inara).

> I thought the fact that neither said anything to deny his assumption was just natural.

Thank you.

> This is going SO well. All your nuance and skill is not going unappreciated.

I appreciate the vote of confidence; reviews like this are why I keep writing. =)