jedibuttercup: Malcolm Reynolds (my Captain)
jedibuttercup ([personal profile] jedibuttercup) wrote2005-11-04 10:31 pm

Fic: An Uncluttered Sky (Firefly, Book's Legacy, 4/?)

PG-15; Firefly crossover. Mal recieves a mysterious package, leading the crew of Serenity on a voyage of discovery. Into every generation...

(Book's Legacy 4: An Uncluttered Sky)

As of October 17, 2006, this story has been rewritten, added to, and moved to a separate community. Link above goes to new location. Story index is here.

(Originally x-posted to [livejournal.com profile] joss100 and [livejournal.com profile] afterserenity)

[identity profile] spikedru-basic.livejournal.com 2005-11-06 06:59 am (UTC)(link)
I agree: Mal's narrative voice is spot on and you've captured the others' voices well in the dialogue. The breakfast scene made me laugh aloud because it was played just right.

I'm glad you're expanding the chapters in this now so that the pacing and structure are less cramped. You've built up the tension before the first Mal/Inara scene wonderfully, so that now I'm impatient to see what happens. I'll be reccing this to anyone who is happy to read WIPs.