http://lily317.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] lily317.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] jedibuttercup 2007-10-24 09:59 pm (UTC)

Hi! I love your story, I've been waiting for this chapter for ages!! I really like how you portray Harry's doubts over his capacity of blending in (is that even english? sorry, I'm not a native), and how he tries to deceive everyone, but he has so much to think about!! (doing Transfiguration like Occlumency, brillant!) His maturity is really obvious, I love that, it shows how much he changed over the years.

If I had to criticize something, I'd say the chapter is a little too enumerative: Quidditch, then Astronomy, Herbology, History of magic, Charms... And you didn't include Potions!!!! I was soooo looking forward to it when you began to describe all the classes, how will Snape react in front of this Harry? (he is bound to notice something is not quite right, right? ^^)

Anyway, this chapter's really great, you have nothing to be nervous about, it was worth the wait! I hope the next one will be up soon!

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